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The given two pie charts show the percentages of cotton production by different countries between 1990 and 2000.

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Two pie
chart
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charts
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 argue the proportion of
cotton
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 manufacture a number of countries
in
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apply
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over 10 year period. 
Overall
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 , it is obvious that
India
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 was the
country
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 which illustrates highest
figure
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cotton output figure
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cotton
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 output in 1990,
overtake
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overtaking
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Canada
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was
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, which was
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 leading in 2000.
Moreover
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,
Australia
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 and
Russia
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 depict decreasing
consequens
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consequences
 in 2000 rather than 1990.
One
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 of the
country
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 was
China
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 contribute harvest of
cotton
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 in ultimate period. On the
one
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 hand,
India
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 has taken just under the half quota given
first
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in the first
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 decade,
in
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despite
it happened declined
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a decline
 in 2000, regardless of it was again the leading staging with 33 %.
Furthermore
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,
one
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 significant change was noticed in
Russia
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witnessed
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, which witnessed
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 the least production of
cotton
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 in
given
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the given
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 time frame
,
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;
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 it illustrated
upward
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an upward
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 trend from 15 % to 7 %. Another major
changes
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change
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 of the second graph is that
China
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 incorporated the assembly of
cotton
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 with 15 % same as
Australia
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that
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, which
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 experienced
diminished
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a decline
 from
one
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-fifth.
In addition
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,
Canada
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 was the
country
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 in which
displayed
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the number
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 rose
twenty
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by twenty
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percent
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per cent
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 to a significant minority.
Overall
Linking Words
 , it is obvious that
India
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 was the
country
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 which illustrates highest
figure
Correct word order
cotton output figure
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cotton
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 output in 1990,
overtake
Wrong verb form
overtaking
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Canada
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was
Correct pronoun usage
, which was
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 leading in 2000.
Moreover
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,
Australia
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 and
Russia
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 depict decreasing
consequens
Correct your spelling
consequences
 in 2000 rather than 1990.
One
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 of the
country
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 was
China
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 contribute harvest of
cotton
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 in ultimate period. On the
one
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 hand,
India
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 has taken just under the half quota given
first
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in the first
show examples
 decade,
in
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apply
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despite
it happened declined
Replace the word
a decline
 in 2000, regardless of it was again the leading staging with 33 %.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
one
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 significant change was noticed in
Russia
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witnessed
Correct pronoun usage
, which witnessed
show examples
 the least production of
cotton
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 in
given
Correct article usage
the given
show examples
 time frame
,
Punctuation problem
;
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 it illustrated
upward
Correct article usage
an upward
show examples
 trend from 15 % to 7 %. Another major
changes
Fix the agreement mistake
change
show examples
 of the second graph is that
China
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 incorporated the assembly of
cotton
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 with 15 % same as
Australia
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that
Correct pronoun usage
, which
show examples
 experienced
diminished
Replace the word
a decline
 from
one
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-fifth.
In addition
Linking Words
,
Canada
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 was the
country
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 in which
displayed
Verb problem
the number
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 rose
twenty
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by twenty
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent
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 to a significant minority.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, in addition, moreover, overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cotton, india, country, canada, australia, russia, one, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depict" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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