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The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.

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demonstrates
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the inhabitants
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the quantities of namely leather back
turtles
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, green
turtles
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, all species and olive Ridley
turtles
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 in
india
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India
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 between 1989 and 2012. It is crystal clear that
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 olive Ridley
turtles
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 experienced
the
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significant growth,
while
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 leatherback
turtles
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 showed a dramatic decline.
Furthermore
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, green
turtles
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 and all species stay stable, with
slightly a
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 fluctuations over the
give
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five-year
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 period.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turtles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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