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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nuclear
Power
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 Nuclear
power
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 is an alternative source of
energy
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 which is
carefully being
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being carefully
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 evaluated during these times of
energy
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 problems. During these
years
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years,
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 we can say that we have
energy
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 problems
but
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, but
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 in more or less 50 years, we will be facing an
energy
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 crisis. Nuclear
power
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 is an alternative source of
energy
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 and unlike
othe
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other
 sources
such
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 as solar
energy
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, nuclear
power
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 is highly effective for industrial
perpouses
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purposes
. If it is handled
correctly
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correctly,
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 there
realy
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really
 is no danger for the public. It is cheap, there is no threat of pollution and best of all
it
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, it
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 is limitless. It is difficult to think about nuclear
power
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 as a good source of
energy
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 for people in general.
This
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 is
due to
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 the use it has been given since its birth during the
second world war
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Second World War
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. It is expressed as military
power
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and
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, and
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 in
fact
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fact,
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 at the
moment
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moment,
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 nuclear
power
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 is limited to
few
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a few
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 hands who consider themselves world powers. When and if there is a change of
idiology
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ideology
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 regarding the correct use of nuclear
power
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,
then
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 we may all benefit from all the advantages nuclear
power
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 can give us. If we outweigh the advantages and disadvantages of nuclear
technology
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technology,
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 we
then
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 have the following
:
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:
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 As stated before, the advantages are that there is
limitless
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a limitless
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 supply, it is cheap, it is effective for industrial perpouse and still there are many benefits which have not yet been discovered. The disadvantages are at present time that it is limited
oo
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to
 only a few countries
who
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that
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 regard it as
safe
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a safe
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 military
power
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 if mishandled, there is risk for the
popullation
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population
 around the plant to undergo contamination
as
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, as
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 we all know happened in
Chernobyl
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Chornobyl
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. If these disadvantages can be overcome,
then
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it is clear that
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 nuclear
energy
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 can give us more benefits than problems. It will
in the future be very important
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be very important in the future
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 as the
energy
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 crisis is not far ahead. In conclusion, nuclear
power
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 is good, it can be safe, and we will all benefit. It is up to our leaders to see that it is handled well so that we can all benefit from it.

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Answer all parts of the task more clearly. You talk more about energy, but you say less about nuclear weapons and world peace.
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Give a clear opinion early and keep it the same all through the essay.
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Add more clear examples, not only Chernobyl. One or two real examples would help a lot.
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Some main ideas are good, but they need more support and explanation.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully, so ideas move in a smoother way.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow, so make each paragraph focus on one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your points back to the question in each body paragraph.
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You give a clear introduction to the topic.
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You include both good and bad sides of nuclear technology.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphs, and this helps the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You have a conclusion, and it matches your main view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrence
  • Mutually assured destruction
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Cost-effective
  • Radiation therapy
  • Proliferation
  • Rogue states
  • Radioactive waste disposal
  • Catastrophic accidents
  • Climate change
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