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describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

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The diagram illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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annula
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annual
 gross domestic product
growth
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 between four periods in wealthy countries,
globalisers
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 and non-
globalisers
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.
Overall
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, the
globalisers
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was
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were
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 increased dramatically every
moments
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moment
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.
While
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 the
wealthy
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number of wealthy
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 countries
was
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apply
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decreased.
In contrast
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, the non
globalisers
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 was significantly up and down. It is clear
in
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that in
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 1960, the top for domestic products was wealthy at approximatly 5%.
Then
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 reduced to 2% is 1990s.
However
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, the
growth
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 for
globalisers
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start
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started
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 near 1% and
reasched to
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reached
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 high peaks in
1990s
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the 1990s
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 at 5%.
Moreever
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Moreover
, the non
globalisers
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 was flacuated
growth
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. Which increased from 1960 to 1970
than
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, then
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 decreased to more than triple below the 1% in
1980s
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the 1980s
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. Later
growth
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 up to 1%. In 1970, the average
of
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apply
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product for all countries
were
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was
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similarly
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 around 3%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, globalisers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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