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> The maps below show the centre of a small town calles Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. >

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Two maps demonstrate ideas for its advancement
for
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in
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 the middle of a little
town
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 named
Islip
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. We can see that there are two maps of
Islip
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city
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.
First
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The first
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 one is the current
Islip
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city
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 as it is. It has some
shops
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, housing,
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school
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a school
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,
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road
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a road
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 and a small
park
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. In the second map, it is a detailed improvement idea of the
city
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. There will be some new things in the
town
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,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 Bus stations, parking areas, bigger roads,
walkway
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a walkway
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 and some other things. Recently, the
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Islip
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town of Islip
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town
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 has
a
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had a
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small
road
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.
Shops
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 are on both sides of
this
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road
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. There is a
school
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 on the southwest
side
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 of the
road
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 and a small
park
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 on the southeast
side
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 of the
road
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.
Housings
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Houses
 are on the south
side
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 of the
shops
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, between the
school
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 and
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park
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the park
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. There is no shortcut connecting
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school
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the school
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 and
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park
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the park
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. We can see that
Islip
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town
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 is situated on the south
side
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 of the countryside. The Advancement idea is to increase
Islip
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's potential to its maximum capacity. We can see that the
town
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 has roads all around it. To add more, the roads will be dual
carriageway
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carriageways
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. There is a walkway in the
center
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centre
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 of the
city
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.
Shops
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 are on the south
side
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 of the
pedestrians
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pedestrian
 way.
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Town
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The town
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 will have
completely
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a completely
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 new thing
on
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in
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 the
north
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northern
 part. A Bus station, A shopping
center
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centre
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 which has a
seperate
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separate
 car parking area and some new housing. They will
also
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 add some new accommodations in the
south
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southern
 part of
they
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their
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city
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.
Park
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 and
school
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 will stay the same
but
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, but
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it
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they
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 will be connected by the
road
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, islip, city, shops, school, road, park, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maps
  • centre of a small town
  • development
  • current
  • planned
  • features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • summary
  • information
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