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The table shows the proportion of people in England who agreed with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table above shows the proportion of people in England who agreed with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013.
Overall
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, non-religious people always accounted for the biggest
percentage
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 among the others,
while
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 other sectors occupied
less
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a smaller
show examples
percentage
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, but still have been growing though. Another interesting point is that almost all percentages among all religions are becoming higher and higher with every year in
this
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 table.
Also
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, non-religious people always got the highest
percentage
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,
while
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 non-Christians stayed with the lowest
percentage
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.
Church
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The Church
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 of England accounted for 9% at the beginning of the period, and grew to 14% in 1995.
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 it rose to 31% 2001, but stayed the same until 2007.
Although
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 the
percentage
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 increased to 55%
at the end
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 of the period. Roman Catholic regarded for 9% ,
as well as
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 the Church of England, but unlike it rose up to 21% in 1995 and to 38% in 2001, respectively, but decreased to 37% in 2003. But shot up to 61% in 2013. Other Christians occupied the same
percentage
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 as the former two categories, and increased to 13% in 1995,
then
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 became even higher to 25% in 2001.
Then
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 grew up to 38% in 2007 and to 54% in 2013, respectively.
Non-Christian
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Non-Christians
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 started with the lowest
percentage
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 among the others at the beginning of the period, but still became higher than the others.
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, to 11% in 1995,
then
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 rose on 8% higher in 2001, but stayed the same in 2007, and increased to 30%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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