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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The world has changed a great deal from the past. Clean
water
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 is important for community
life
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.
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,
people
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 need clean
water
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in
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at
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 home.
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 essay will explain the reasons
for
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why people
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people
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 why they need to
provided
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be provided
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free
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with free
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water
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. On the one hand, there are many reasons for
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disputes
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 cuases.
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, clean
water
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 is
important
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an important
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 thing for
healthy
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a healthy
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life
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.
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, if
people
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not
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do not
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 receive clean
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, they will be sick.
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, the disease will grow between
people
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, human rights
organization
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organisations
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 have low about clean
water
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 , and they call for all countries
must
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to
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 care for
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 cuases.
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, governments should pay and spend more money to supply clean
water
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for
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to
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people
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.
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,
this
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 will help poor comunities they cannot pay for clean
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,
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apply
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 clean
water
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 is a main thing for
people
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 and a long
life
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.
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, I completely agree to access to clean
water
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 for every home
with free of
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at no
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 charge, because of
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 , the
people
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 work for
government
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the government
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, farms, and
investment many
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invest a lot
 of money for they countries.
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, everybody pays taxes for their government
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, so they should
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then
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 should they get mainly services like
water
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, and healthcare for a wonderful
life
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. In conclusion, access to clean
water
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 is a basic human right.
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, every home should have a
water
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 supply
that is
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 provided free of charge.
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, I show my reasons and experience for
this
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 cause.

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task response
Make your main idea more clear from the start. Say if you fully agree, partly agree, or disagree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Add one or two real and clear examples. For example, talk about poor families, small towns, or a country that gives free water help.
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Explain each main point more. Do not only say clean water is important; say why and how free water helps people, health, and daily life.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer paragraph plan. One paragraph can give your first reason, the next can give your second reason, and then end with a short clear conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Use words like first, also, for this reason, and in conclusion, but use them correctly.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence connect well to the next one. Some lines now feel hard to follow, so try shorter and more direct sentences.
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You answer the main question and give a clear opinion that free water is important.
coherence and cohesion
You include an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so the essay has a full shape.
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Your essay stays on the topic of water, health, government help, and poor people.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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