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in the past role of teachers was to provide information. today students have access to wide sources of information there is therefore no role of teacher in modern education. do you agree or disagree?

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree or disagree with the idea about teachers.
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Keep your main idea the same all through the essay. Do not change from talking about teachers to only talking about study ways.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction, 2 body parts, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a clear way. Use words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph about one main point only.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, body, and conclusion.
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You try to give reasons for your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some link words like moreover and in conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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