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The graph below shows the per capita consumption of butter and margarine in the United States between 1980 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
consumer
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consumption
 of
buuter
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butter
 and margarine in the United States, in decade from 1980 to 2020.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
comsumpation
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consumption
 of
marharine
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marine
 was
dominted
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dominant
 in 1980 and it fell consistently over the period ,
while
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 the butter increased
consistenctly troughtout
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consistently throughout
 the period. Taking a closer look,
In
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in
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 1980 the consumer of
margraine
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margarine
 was around
at
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apply
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11
ibs
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, and it decreased slight reached at 8
ibs
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 in 1990.
However
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, the consumption of
buuter
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butter
 started at 5
ibs
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, and it faced a slight fall
reached
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and reached
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aroughly
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a rough plateau
 at 5
ibs
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. Both the
consumpation
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consumption
 of
margraine
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margarine
 and butter were almost at 5
ibs
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. After 10 years, the proportion of butter climed steadly reached around 5
ibs
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,
whereas
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 the
margarin
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margarine
 went down
slowly
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slowly,
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 reched at 3
ibs
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.
In
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At
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 the end of
period
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the period
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, the buyers of margarine stood at 2
ibs
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, and the lovers of buuter stand at 6.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ibs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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