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The chart below shows information about the favourite subjects of 60 students from two schools, school A and school B.

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Presented in the given bar graph are data relating to
subjects
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 which are preferred by 60 students in 2 schools ,
such
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 as
school
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 A and
school
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B
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 the sport recorded the highest index in
School
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 A,
science
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subjects
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 accounted for the smallest figure. Observing in detail, social
science
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subjects
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 are represented 5 and 10, in
school
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 A and
school
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B
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 . The figure for the
science
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 field differs significantly, accounting for 10 in
school
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 A and 2 in
school
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B
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 , which is the lowest share. Turning to the language-related
subjects
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,
while
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School
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 A constituted 5 , which is similar to social
science
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,
School
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B
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 represented 18. The figure for the craft subject accounts for 4 and 25 relatively. Sport
subjects
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 showed the largest index, making up 36 in
school
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 A,
while
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,
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school
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B
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 showed 5 , which is almost the lowest one.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subjects, school, b, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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