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As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on daily basis are produced in another country and have to be transported long distances . Do benefits of this trend outweigh disadvantages

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As global
trade
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 increases, many goods
including
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, including
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 those we use on
daily
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a daily
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basis
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basis,
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 are produced in another country and have to be transported long distances . Do
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of
this
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 trend outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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Due to
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 growth in global
trade
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, some products
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,
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including ones that we consume
daily
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daily,
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 are manufactured in another country and have to be shipped over long distances.
As
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It
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 is widely
recognized
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recognised
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 that global
trade
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 brings about some
benefits
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 and downsides.
This
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 essay will touch on both positive sides and negative sides. With regard to
benefits
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, consumers can use their time efficiently. Ordering a wide range of commodities online and getting them with the help of international transportation, shoppers are able to save their time and allocate it to more useful activities. To illustrate, busy caregivers can access an array of goods without seeking
for
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apply
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someone who can keep an eye on their children.
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, thanks to express delivery systems offered by major online retailers,
such
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 as Amazon, Temu, Aliexpress
parents
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, parents
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 do not need to leave their houses
,
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; instead,
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instead
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 they stay in their comfort zone and are engaged in childcare and housekeeping
etc
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, etc
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. Another significant advantage is that international
trade
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 enables customers to purchase a variety of goods relatively inexpensively, which
allow
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allows
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 them to
economize
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economise
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 on financial resources. Nowadays, a growing number of
manufactures
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manufacturers
are inclined to offer comparatively lower prices in order to attract numerous clients.
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, shoppers can pay even twice or three times less than they
are offered
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would
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 in local shops. A case in point is
,
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that
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 Azerbaijani customers can pay just a few manats in Trendyol for the medicine
which
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, which
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 is not only of high quality, but
also
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 exceptionally
affordable
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more affordable
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 than drugs available locally. Most importantly, these people can successfully put something away for a rainy day. In terms of negative impacts, a substantial increase in
import
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imports
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 and
export
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exports
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leads to some ecological challenges.
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, different means of vehicles used to carry the items globally
,
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apply
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pollute the air as they emit toxic chemicals into the atmosphere.
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, if individuals got
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the
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required items in commercial centres ,
where
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which
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 they could reach by walking,
environment
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the environment
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 would receive relatively less harm. To illustrate, consumers had better shop for groceries and dairy products in the nearest retail centres, which are eco-friendly
rather
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, rather
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 than ordering online.
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, if a consumer heads to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 in his neighbourhood on foot for a carton of milk
he
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, he
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 does not have to use cars which
produce
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produces
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 hazardous chemicals for nature. In conclusion,
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 of a constant rise in international retail, people tend to order even daily items from foreign countries.
Accordingly
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,
this
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 tendency can pave the way for
benefits
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,
such
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 as spending resources effectively. Meanwhile, it can cause serious environmental problems by sending dangerous gases
to
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into
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 the air. To tackle possible harms and benefit from opportunities, consumers need to maintain a balance between international and domestic
trade
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 by trading only for unique
merchandises
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merchandise
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 globally and addressing mainly
surrounding
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the surrounding
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 markets for all the other needs.

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Give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Say if the good points are more than the bad points.
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Write more about why the good points are stronger, not only list them.
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Some examples are good, but a few do not fully fit the main point. Keep each example very close to the idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. This is good, but some ideas are too long and hard to follow.
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Use shorter sentences. This will make your meaning easier to see.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking words are used well, but a few are not natural. Use simple links like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
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You answer both sides of the topic and give more than one good point.
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You use real world examples to support your ideas.
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Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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Each body paragraph has one main focus.
Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global trade
  • economic growth
  • specialization
  • efficient resource use
  • variety of products
  • consumers
  • accessibility
  • standard of living
  • economies of scale
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental damage
  • importation
  • quality standards
  • local industries
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