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Band 1

As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on daily basis are produced in another country and have to be transported long distances . Do benefits of this trend outweigh disadvantages

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Due to
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 growth in global trade, some products
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including ones that we consume
daily
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daily,
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 are manufactured in another country and have to be shipped
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over long distances.
As
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It
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 is widely
recognized
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 that global trade brings about some benefits and downsides.
This
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 essay will touch on both positive sides and negative sides. With regard to downsides, consumers can use their time
efficently
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efficiently
. Purchasing a wide range of commodities online and getting them with the help of international transportation, shoppers are able to save their time and allocate it to more useful activities. To illustrate, moms can access an array of goods without seeking
for
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someone to babysit
her
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 children.

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Task response: Answer the question more fully. You need to say clearly if the benefits are bigger than the disadvantages.
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Task response: Add more ideas about both sides. Now you only write one downside and do not explain the benefits.
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Task response: Give a clear conclusion at the end with your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use a simple plan: introduction, one body paragraph for disadvantages, one body paragraph for benefits, then conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Make each main idea clear and support it with one short example and one explanation.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some links are not clear. Use simple words like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
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You have a clear topic sentence about global trade and its good and bad sides.
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You give one example about mothers saving time, which helps support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing has a short introduction and one body idea, so there is a basic structure.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global trade
  • economic growth
  • specialization
  • efficient resource use
  • variety of products
  • consumers
  • accessibility
  • standard of living
  • economies of scale
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental damage
  • importation
  • quality standards
  • local industries
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