IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1972 and 2000 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
The line graph illustrates how many
goods
Use synonyms
transferred
Verb problem
were transferred
show examples
 in the
UK
Use synonyms
 by four different
method
Fix the agreement mistake
methods
show examples
 of transport, from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 most of the
goods
Use synonyms
 transported in
Use synonyms
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
 by road showed an upward trend
while
Linking Words
 pipeline remained relatively stable.
between
Fix capitalization
Between
show examples
 1974 and 1986
things
Check wording
, the amount of goods
show examples
 carried in
Use synonyms
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
 by road increased and hit the highest point at 80 million
tonnes
Use synonyms
Linking Words
while
Punctuation problem
, while
show examples
goods
Use synonyms
 carried in
Use synonyms
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
 by Water rose to around 55 million
tonnes
Use synonyms
 and
stayed
Verb problem
remained
show examples
 constant
followed by
Punctuation problem
.
show examples
 Rail showed a little change
from
Punctuation problem
, from
show examples
 40
m
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 to approximately 38
m
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
meanwhile
Punctuation problem
. Meanwhile,
show examples
 pipeline peaked at about 24
m
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 and remained unchanged.
from
Fix capitalization
From
show examples
 1990 to 2002
Punctuation problem
,
show examples
goods
Use synonyms
 carried in
Use synonyms
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
 by road rose gradually and reached 95
m
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
Punctuation problem
. Thereafter,
show examples
thereafter
Linking Words
goods
Use synonyms
 carried in
Use synonyms
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
 by water experienced a
little
Correct word choice
slight
show examples
 decline
Linking Words
then
Punctuation problem
, then
show examples
 grew slightly and stood at 60
m
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
Punctuation problem
. Goods
show examples
whereas
Linking Words
goods
Use synonyms
 carried in
Use synonyms
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
using Rail
Change preposition
by rail
show examples
 showed little change and recorded the highest figure at 40
m
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
tonnes
Punctuation problem
tonnes,
show examples
while
Linking Words
 pipeline stood at 20
m
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, uk, tonnes, m with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: