The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

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Overview
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Shakefield
changed
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has changed
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a lot from 1995 until now. become more modern and more built up, with more homes, roads, and
service
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services
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,
while
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some old areas were removed or changed. The past map details, they have
park
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but now don't,
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however
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however,
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they have
park
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parked
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in the
secand
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second
said you
cav
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can
see it in the left
corrner
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corner
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In
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the other
hand
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hand,
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they have parking cars.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expand
  • change a lot
  • residential area
  • housing estate
  • public building
  • road link
  • open land
  • replace
  • modern
  • facility
  • town center
  • become busier
  • better connected
  • on the north/south side
  • in the middle of
  • used to be
  • has been changed into
  • was removed
  • at present
  • compared with 1995
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