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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You know that a building company is planning to build new houses in immediate proximity to your house. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter – Say how you found out about their plan – Describe how you feel about it – Explain what you hope that they do about it

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Dear Sir, The primary objective of
this
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 correspondence is to put forth my
conserns
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concerns
 regarding your company's
planning
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plan
 to build new
houses
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 near
to
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my house. I recently
learn
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 from the notice on the wall that new
houses
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 are going to be created near my house.
Furthermore
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, my neighbours
also
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 informed me via
Whatsapp
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. I am quite concerned about it, since I live here with my wife and an infant.
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, I am worried about the noise and traffic that would be very disturbing for my family.
Moreover
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, not just the noise and traffic are the problems
but
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also
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, it actually represents
as
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a threat to my privacy. My wife spends most of her time in the garage
and
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 we do not have a shelter over our garage. So, building
houses
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immediate
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 proximity to my house would actually breach
privacy
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the privacy
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 of my family.
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, I have several suggestions for the company in order to mitigate the reasons
of
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 my apprehension.
First,
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I would really
appriciate
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appreciate
 it
,
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 if you review your plans.
Secondly
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, if the
houses
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 are going to be constructed anyway, I would request you to keep enough space between
houses
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.
Additionally
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, limiting work hours would
also
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 be helpful. I
realize
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 that it will be inconvenient to you, but
very
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 much hope that, given the circumstances, you would be prepared to work on it. I look forward to a positive response from you. Yours sincerely, Ameera.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but some ideas need clearer support.
task response
Task response: Use more exact words to explain what you want the company to do.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some sentences are hard to follow. Link ideas in a simpler way.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
task response
Task response: You say how you found out, how you feel, and what you want.
task response
Task response: Your purpose is clear from the first paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use paragraphs, and this helps the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The ending is polite and clear.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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