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The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

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The line chart illustrates the number of US consumers'
cell
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phone
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services
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 and residential
phone
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services
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 between 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the figuer of
Cell
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phone
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services
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 increase drmatically,
whereas
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 residential
phone
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services
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 of the consumer
expenditure
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 survey decreased significantly.
While
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 both
cell
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phone
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services
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 and residential
phone
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services
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 are completely opposite in
consumer
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the consumer
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expenditure
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 survey. In detail,
cell
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phone
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services
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 it begenined at $200 in 2002 reach to $300. The figure in 2003 significantly increased to around $650 in 2007, and
then
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 increased slightly to $670.
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period
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 the figure reached a peak of around $790.
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, in 2001 to
2002
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2002,
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 the consumer
expenditure
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 on residential
phone
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services
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 was around $650. The number of consumers decreased gradually in 2006 repesent around $550, to $480 in 2007. The
expenditure
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 ervey approximatly $400 in 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cell, phone, services, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average annual spending
  • consumer expenditure
  • cell phone services
  • residential phone services
  • line graph
  • compare
  • increase
  • go up
  • rise steadily
  • fall steadily
  • drop
  • become higher than
  • almost the same
  • reach
  • from 2001 to 2010
  • overall
  • in contrast
  • while
  • whereas
  • figure
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