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The line araph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990.

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The line chart provides key information about
three
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the three
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 different types of junk food
are
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apply
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consumed in the UK over the course of 20 years, from 1970 to 1990. The units are measured in
grams
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that Fish and Chips had the highest consumption in the
finely
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first
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 year,
whereas
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 the pizza was
in the
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apply
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initially
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 peaked but with the years it experienced a
decreased
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decrease
.
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According to is
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As
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 shown, Pizza in 1970 to 1975 fell slightly
at
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to
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 under 300
grams
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.
However
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, in the years ranging from 1980
until
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to
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 the
period
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period,
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 it remained stable at approximately 200
grams
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 . In terms of Hamburger was increasing slightly by under 50
grams
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, until the year 1985 to 1990 it significantly jumped to almost 300
grams
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.
Therefore
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,the Fish and Chips had the most consumption in
this
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 line graph by 500
grams
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at
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in
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 1990, and all of the interval was growing.

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Write a clear overview. Say the main trends in one or two lines.
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Use the right data. Check years, rises, falls, and end points more carefully.
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Add key comparisons between the three foods, not only one food at a time.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easy to follow. Use simple order: year, trend, number.
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Link ideas with easy words like overall, while, but, and, from, to.
coherence and cohesion
Group similar trends together. For example, write one part for rise and one part for fall or stable data.
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You wrote an introduction and an overall idea.
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You used some numbers from the chart.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to describe changes over time.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has basic paragraphing.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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