The line graph below shows the total numbers of three type of crimes in England.

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The line graph compares the three regions in terms of crime rates between 1970 and 2005.
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, the three regions experienced different trends
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the car
stealings
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thefts
rose with some fluctuations, the street robberies barely increased over time. As the graph shows, car thefts
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400000 in 1970,
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steadily increased to 1 million in 1990. Afterwards, the numbers climbed rapidly to 1.6 million in 1995,
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fell rapidly to 1 million in 2005.
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, the house
burglings
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stood at 200000 in 1970, and
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figure grew gradually to nearly 700000 in 1995.
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, the amount declined slowly to 500000in 2005.
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of robberies in the street amounted
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100000 in 1970,
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rate remained
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unchanged in 1990.
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, the
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street theft grew respectively to 200000 in 2005.

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