The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following bar chart
illustrats
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illustrates
the
number
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of trips per year, to and from school, made by students aged between 5-12 using five types of
trasnportation
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transportation
in 1990 and 2010. The units are measured in millions.
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, what stands out from the graph is that there is an upward trend in mobility by the different ways of transport in 1990,
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cars were less common in that year
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however
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, in
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2010,
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a significant
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increase
happened in the
number
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of children who use
this
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kind of transport. Looking more
detailed
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closely
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at the chart reveals that a considerable reduction
occured
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occurred
in the
number
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of students who walk to their schools after
hiting
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hitting
a peak of over 12
million
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in 1990 to just 6
million
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students in 2010.
Similary
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Similarly
, walking and using
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buses
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together, and cycling were
approxemately
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approximately
the same in 1990 at 6
million
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, but in 2010, both the figures decreased significantly
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nearly 4
million
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and exactly 2
million
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respectively.
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, vehicles were less popular in 1990
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the
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was just about 4
million
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, suddenly
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, it
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was recorded
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as the second
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most common
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way of commute behined walking, accounting for around 12
million
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in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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