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The table below shows the use of water for different purposes in four countries.

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The table compares four
countriess
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countries
 in terms of water use in three sectors.
Overall
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, agriculture was the dominant purpose for the usage
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while
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, while
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 the least water
used
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was used
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 for household. As the table shows, Canadian people used the most water for domestic use with 20%,
whereas
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 New
zealand
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Zealand
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 was twice as
lower
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low
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 with 10%. And the country that used it least was Saudi Arabia
amounting
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, amounting
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 6%.
Similarly
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, in Industry Canada
leaded
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led
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 these stats being significantly higher with 70% compared to New Zealand
which
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, which
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 was at 46%. Regarding, Saudi Arabia proportioned 30%, and Egypt accounted
only
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for only
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 10%
being
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, being
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 the least in
this
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 trend.
By contrast
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, Egypt
that
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, which
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 had been
at
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in
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last
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places
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place
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 in both terms, in agriculture
this
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 figure was significantly higher with 82%,
while
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 New Zealand was lower
two times
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twice
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 at 44%. Though
,
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apply
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 numbers in
Agricuture
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Agriculture
 in Canada
wasn't
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weren't
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so
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as
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 high as the others, it equaled to 10% only.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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