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The bar chart shows the distribution of employment among agriculture, services, industries in three countries in 1980 and projected distribution in 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar
chat
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chart
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 illustrates the distribution of
employment
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 among agriculture, services,
industries
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and industries
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 in
three
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 nations in 1980 and in 2020. In
country
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countries
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 A and C, the
employment
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percentage
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 of the
three
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 sectors in 1980 is similar to
theirs
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that
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 in
2020
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2020,
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while
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 in
the
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apply
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country B, the
employment
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percentage
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 of the
three
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 fields have significant change in 1980 compared to
theirs
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that
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 in 2020. In 1980, the number of
Agricuture
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Agriculture
employment
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 in country A was 29%
,
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, and in 2020 it occupied 10%, which
took over
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was
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 the
least
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lowest
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percentage
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 among
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three
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the three
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sector
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sectors
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. The sector having more
percentage
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 was service. The service
employment
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 was 30% in 1980, and in
2020
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2020,
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 it was still nearly 30%, and the industry
employment
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 had the
most
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highest
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percentage
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, in 1980, it was over 40%, and in 2020, it was over 50%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, three, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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