You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Introduce yourself Explain the situation Say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
for repairing
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a new
camera
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, which I bought from your store
last
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month. I am Sam, and I am a photographer by profession. Recently, I bought a Panasonic Lumix from the Henry's
camera
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store, and it
worth
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me around 2000 CAD. I found
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camera
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is quite modern, and famous for capturing
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moment
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. My excitement turned into disappointment when
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this
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that this
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camera
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is
malfunctional
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malfunctioning
. I was unable to record
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videos properly, inferior picture quality, and my sound
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comes as
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I am
mummbling
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mumbling
. I made a complaint to the company, and returned the
camera
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to the company. They asked me to deliver it within a week, but nothing
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yet. I humbly request you to solve
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matter on
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an urgent
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basis. I would really appreciate
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you could help me in replacement, or
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otherwise
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a full refund from your side would be more appreciable. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Sam.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some details are not clear. Say the problem in a more direct way and ask for one clear action at the end.
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Task response: The tone is polite, but some word choice is not right for a formal letter. Use simple and clear lines.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some sentences do not link well. Use clear time words like 'when', 'after that', and 'now'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Most paragraphs have one main idea, but the problem paragraph has many ideas in one place. Group the problems in a simple order.
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Task response: You introduce yourself, explain the problem, and ask the company to act. This covers the task well.
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Task response: Your ending is polite and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter uses good paragraphing.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The opening and closing fit a formal letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • company representative
  • malfunction
  • repair
  • defect
  • disappointment
  • timeline
  • replacement
  • refund
  • purchased
  • return policy
  • customer service
  • satisfaction
  • issue
  • product quality
  • communication
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