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The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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This
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 table depicts data about the genres of
films
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 that were released independently in the UK and the Republic of Ireland
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 in the year of 2012.
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, documentaries and dramas were the most popular in terms of
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 of releases,
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 comedies made up the highest percentage of income from ticket sales. When it comes to the number of movies released, dramas and documentaries rank first with 35 of each of
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films
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 from these genres being released in 2012.
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, the rest of the motion pictures released, in descending order, were comedy themed (26), horror (14), thriller (13), other types (8), crime (7), romance (5), action (4), and
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, biopic (1). In total
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 in the United Kingdom and the Republic of Ireland. Despite being ranked third in quantity of releases, comedies rank first in percentage of income from tickets sold, with 45.4%. In terms of quotient of tickets sold, after comedies rank: horror movies (20.2%), biopics (9.1%), dramas (8.3%), crime
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(4.7%), action
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 (4.1%), other
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 (3.2%), documentaries (2.9%), thrillers(1.3%), and
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, romances (0.8%), in descending order. Biopics, despite only having one motion picture of
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 kind released, make up an impressive 9.1% of tickets sold.
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, the
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 of movies released does not equate to more ticket sales.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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