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Band 3

Fewer and fewer people today right by hand using a pen pencil or brush. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Writing by pen
pencils
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, pencils
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or
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 brushes is
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decreasing
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people
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use
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who use
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 them in writing on paper or leather. In
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if
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whether
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this
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 positive or a negative development.
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last
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 decade
many
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devices
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 is development
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such
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, such
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 as computers,
mobil
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mobile
 phones, laptops, and
tables
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tablets
.
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Advanced technology
 effects on lifestyle.
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, writing using these advanced
devices
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make
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makes
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this
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 skill
easer
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easier
 and faster.
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, many
people
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 around the world prefer using laptops for writing formal
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documents
 or phones to send short
masseges
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messages
.
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, a lot
od
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of
 companies or facilities depend on improve techological to achieve tasks with higher
precission
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precision
 quality. On
another
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the
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apply
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most
people
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 face
problem
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problems
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 with
shapping
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shaping
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 text and spelling mistakes. Because they
miss write
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misswrite
 by hand and react with pencils or
bruches
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brushes
. So
that
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apply
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, there
are decrease
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is
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 a distinctive text on papers or leather and
reduce
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a reduction in
 the number of
people
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have
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who have
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 hope of writing or
preinting
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printing
 skills.
However
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, many
people
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pelieve
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believe
 that writing with
devices
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 is more essential for our jobs. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, writing by pen or brush has the
posivtives
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positives
 and negatives
effect
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effects
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 on lifestyle
deu
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due
 to fast writing by
devices
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more
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being more
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prefer
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preferred
 than hand writing for many
people
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 and has many benefits for us.

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Answer both parts more clearly. Say why people write by hand less, and say clearly if this is more positive or more negative.
coherence and cohesion
Give one clear main idea in each body paragraph. Then add one or two simple support ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy link words like First, Also, However, and In conclusion to guide the reader.
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Add a simple real example, like students using phones or offices using computers.
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Keep your opinion the same from start to end. Do not say both sides without a clear final choice.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote an introduction and a conclusion.
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You gave some reasons, like phones, laptops, and faster writing.
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Your essay stays on the topic most of the time.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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