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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two line graphs
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 the rate of
the
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New Zealand imports from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.
Overall
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, the
import
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 figures from Australia became higher
at the end
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 of the
peroid
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period
 than at the start.
On the other hand
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, the
amout
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amount
 of
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import figures
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imports
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 from Japan decreased drastically during 1994-2004. Moving to a more detailed analysis, it can be seen that during 1994-1997 the
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import
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imports
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 from Japan increased from 3000 to
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 nearly
,
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 6000
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millions
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million
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,
while
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 the Australian
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import
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imports
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 grew from 4000 to 6500
millons
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million
 during 1994-1996.
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, from 1996
to1999
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to 1999
 the Australian
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import
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imports
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 fell to 3000
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millions
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million
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.
Similarly
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, the Japanese
import
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 went down to 4000
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millions
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million
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 from 1997
to1999
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to 1999
.
Also
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, it rose to 6000
millions
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 in 1999, but had a large downfall to 2000
millions
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 during 2000-2004.
However
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, the Australian
import
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 increased heavily to 7500
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millions
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million
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 during 1999-2001, and reduced to 5000
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millions
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million
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 in 2001. Despite
this
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 fact, 2002 and 2003 were extremely profitable years, because of
high
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a high
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increae
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increase
 of 8000
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millions
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million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words import, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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