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Some people think to know about other countries, book , movies, video are good enough to know about them. Other thinks teavelling to different countries is better option to know about them. To what extent you agree or disagree.

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The world is full of wisdom and diversity in the form of different countries, cultures, religions, history and many more. To satisfy the curiosity for other
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, people have lots of resources in
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 of text, movies and the internet . But in my opinion, I would say that theabove mentioned resources give an idea for a picture to some extent
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but the real-life experience is irreplaceable. I will enunciate ate my point of view in
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 paragraphs. Globalisation shrinks the world and gives a platform to exchange information, resources and skills. People can get access to any piece of information anytime with
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 clicks on the screen.
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, numerous books are available to satisfy the hunger of unknown. Even those who don't know how to read books, knowledge is available in videos , movies form. All these gifts of
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 help a lot to know a lot about other countries to some extent.
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, real-life exposure gives you insight into every
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,
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 of every region. The knowledge and information gained from first-hand experience is deep and real.
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, snow
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looks fabulous
 in movies
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 when you live in an area like Northern Ontario, you will know how life feels stuck because of snow on roads
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 lots of car accidents occur because of
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 icy roads. To recapitualte I would state that pictures and books give an idea
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 travelling the countries tells you more than that because it comes
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 your experience and touches your mind and heart at tremendous level.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly how much you agree in the first paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each body paragraph and explain it a bit more.
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Add one more clear example to support your view.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'for example'.
coherence and cohesion
Check that every sentence helps your main point.
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You give a clear opinion that travel is better than books or films alone.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You use one real example about snow to support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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