The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea. What are the reasons for this? What solutions could be used to tackle the situation?

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The animal

species

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are becoming extinct

due to

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many human activities on land and

sea

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. What are the reasons for

this

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? What solutions could be used to tackle the situation? In

this

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contemperory

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contemporary

era, human beings are developing the world

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a rapid pace by doing various

transfromations

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transformations

to the earth and

sea

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Hense

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Hence

, a

lot

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of animal

species

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are affected by

this

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. In

this

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essay

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I will

disuss

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discuss

the major reasons and provide valid solutions.

Nowadays

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humans are trying to take care of their appearance in public more than ever.

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, the garment and

cosmatic

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industries are constantly attempting to provide the supply on demand by rapidly

devoloping

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developing

new effective methods.

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leads to many animal

testings

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tests

and brings harm to

species

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such

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as rabbits, monkeys and even insects

such

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as moths when extracting silk. Most of the animals used for these

puposes

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purposes

do not survive during the experiments or other purposes. In many countries

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such

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india

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India

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, most of their sewer lines are directly or indirectly connected to the

sea

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extreamly

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extremely

harmful for the coral

species

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and fish. A clear example of

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there

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that there

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are a

lot

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of organisations

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such

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Peta

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PETA

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, providing

research backed

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research-backed

statistics of how many animals

that

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apply

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are

getting

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being

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abused by these companies. Already there are a

lot

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of measures has been

taked

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taken

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by governments and non-profit

organizations

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organisations

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in different

contries

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countries

, but it doesn't provide neither adequat protection

nor

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methods to reduce extinction.

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Therefore

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there must me stricker regulations implemented and all of the

cosmaitc

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cosmetic

manufacturing companies should be monitored constantly.

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, animal

testings

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testing

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should be prevented at all costs and the

panelty

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penalty

for

that

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those

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who

voilate

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violate

the regulations should be increased significantly to prevent individuals from starting businesses that make profits from using animals.

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Also

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one other contributing solution is

that disconnecting

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to disconnect

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all the sewer lines that are connected to the

sea

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and find alternative methods to prevent them

entering

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from entering

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the

sea

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there

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There

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are a

lot

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of endangered

species

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are

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apply

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out there

and

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there

multiple

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are multiple

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solutions to protect them before going extinct.

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Jun 22, 2026

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task response

Answer both parts more fully. You give reasons and solutions, but some ideas are too short.

coherence and cohesion

Use clearer main ideas in each body paragraph. One paragraph should focus on reasons, and one on solutions.

task response

Add more direct examples linked to animal extinction on land and in the sea.

coherence and cohesion

Use linking words more carefully, like 'first', 'also', 'as a result', and 'finally'.

coherence and cohesion

Check that each sentence clearly supports the main point of the paragraph.

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Develop your conclusion more clearly by repeating the main reasons and solutions in a short way.

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You answer both questions in the task.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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You try to use examples such as animal testing and sea pollution.

coherence and cohesion

There is a clear attempt to organise ideas in a logical order.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Linking words
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3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
37
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

346 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

extinct = no longer existing
species = a group of animals or plants of the same kind
habitat = the natural home of an animal or plant
deforestation = cutting down many trees in a large area
overfishing = catching too many fish
pollution = dirty or harmful substances in land, air, or water
oil spill = oil that leaks into the sea or land
climate change = long-term change in weather and temperature
conservation = the work of protecting animals and nature
illegal hunting = hunting against the law
protected area = a place where nature is kept safe
biodiversity = many different kinds of life in one place
waste water = used dirty water
sustainable = able to continue without harming nature
tackle = deal with a problem

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