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The following maps show the changes that have taken place in the centre of a town since 1700. See all user-written answers on this topic

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 two maps present the modifications that have been implemented in the centre of a town since 1700.
Firstly
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, two shops and eleven houses have been constructed
in
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 the south side, in place of the fields, but the area covered
reamained aproximately
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remained approximately
 the same.
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, a supermarket was placed there
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 it is right next to the wide road that was created and the new roundabout, which is located on the High Street.
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, now there is a car park and a
big
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 number of buildings in the northern part. They were built in place of the Goode Farm,
that
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 was removed, but the size of the field covered
reamained
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remained
 unchanged. At the same time, in place of the Steggle Farm,
it was constructed the Steggle Road
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the Steggle Road was constructed
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, cutting
as well
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through the
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 same ground from the field on the
northweastern
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northwestern
 side.
On
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 that field
has been created a public park
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, a public park has been created
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.
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, the centre of the town underwent a number of striking alterations,
as
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including
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 the construction of new buildings and the creation of new roads.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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