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Marryland is a village near Tokyo. Since the 1970s, the village's population has increased exponentially. The map below shows the village's development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate how the city of Frenton developed over 22 years.
Overall
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, in 1990 the town was greener,
while
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,
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 in 2012,
was constructed many new buildings
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many new buildings were constructed
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. It indicates
increase
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an increase
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 in the town population and general improvement of living in
this
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 area, but, at the same time,
decrease
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a decrease
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 in the green areas.
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, some of the old buildings were replaced by modern variants. Moving to a more detailed analysis, it can be seen that the bank was redeveloped into the restaurant,
the
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 hospital became larger compared to the
privious
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previous
 variant.
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, the green area in the southwest part of the city was reorganised into the technopark.
the
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 same is true for the playing fields with trees, where now
stands
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stand
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 the new blocks of flats. The flats were
also
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 built near the
houses
Replace the word
housing
 zone, which was changed into
the
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blocks of flats.
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, the cafe and the park areas now occupy the hotel and the golf course.
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 important to mention that the theatre was changed into
the
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a
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 cinema,
while
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on
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in
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 the place of
old
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the old
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 shops stands the supermarket.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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