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Band 5.5

the plans below show a student accommodation building in 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below give information about a
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 accommodation building in 2010 and now.
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, the central part of the building didn’t change at all, but the top and bottom parts of the map have been changed a lot. Starting with the plan in 2010, the building was surrounded by gardens. Upon entering through the main entrance and walking along the hallway, there was a single-
student
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 bedroom next to the bathroom. Moving on, on the left side of the picture, another
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's bedroom was located in the bottom-left corner, under the kitchen area. To the side of the kitchen is the final
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 bedroom, accompanied by a living
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. The end of the hall was empty as the garden area was located outside. Turning the attention to the second map of our times, the upper part of the plan was completely filled with
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 bedrooms, which have replaced the living
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 and part of the garden. Rooms in the middle remained unchanged. The hallway territory was partly taken up by the en-suite
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, which led into the
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’s
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 under the kitchen. The garden’s space along the building by the main entrance was demolished, and a parking lot was built on its site.

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Add more key changes in a clear way. Say what stayed the same and what changed in each part.
coherence and cohesion
Use more exact map words. For example, say 'north', 'south', 'left', or 'right' in one clear system.
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Some ideas are not fully correct or fully clear. Check each room and change carefully.
coherence and cohesion
Make links between sentences smoother. Use simple words like 'also', 'while', 'in contrast', and 'meanwhile'.
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Your overview is good, but it can be stronger if you include the main new features like the car park and en-suite room.
coherence and cohesion
Group details by area in a more even way, for example center, north, and south.
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You gave a clear overview at the start.
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You compared the two plans in most parts of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear paragraph order.
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You used basic linking words well, such as 'overall', 'starting with', and 'turning the attention'.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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