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On a recent holiday, you lost valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. -What is the item - how you lost it -what you want to do

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to inform you that I lost an important
item
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 during my recent holiday, and I would like to request
you
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that you
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to
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compensate me for that
item
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 under my travel insurance policy. The
item
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 which I lost was my iPhone 16
pro max
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Pro Max
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. It was gifted to me by my parents on my
last
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 birthday, which makes it emotionally
value
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valuable
.
Moreover
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, it contained
esssential
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essential
 documents, files, and beautiful memories in it I vividly remember
,
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I visited
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 a nearby park with my friends on 26th
june
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June
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. We performed a couple of
excercies
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exercises
 and yoga
posses
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poses
 there. At that time, I had kept my phone in my pocket, and it may have slipped out
while
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 I was running. Despite searching carefully, I was unable to locate it, or even I contact the cleaning staff by explaining the description of the mobile phone. But nothing worked out. I humbly request
you
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that you
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to
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grant me
a
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compensation for that
item
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. I am ready to provide the IMEI number, purchase receipts, or any other details
,
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 which may help to speed up the claim procedure. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
Say more about what you want from the company, like full payment or next step.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word errors so your ideas are more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like also, then, and so to join ideas better.
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Use the right formal words, for example emotional value is better than emotionally value.
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You answered all three parts of the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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The tone is polite and good for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph mostly has one main idea.
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