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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the charge in percentage of the population age 65 and obove in three countries.

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The table
provide
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provides
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 data regarding the charge in
precentage
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percentage
 of
population
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the population
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 older
age
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than
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 65 years and above in three
countary
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countries
,
such
Linking Words
 as Canada ,
Germany
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 and
UK
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the UK
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from
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, from
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 1988 to 2030
Overall
Linking Words
, the older people in
germany
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 is it higher
precentage
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percentage
 during all centary in addiation the UK
lowest
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has the lowest
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from
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among the
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 three
country
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countries
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 In 1988, the
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germany old age
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old age population in Germany
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was 20% from the total
of
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apply
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population and increased 5% in
2000
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2000,
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 may increasing a round 30% in 2030.
canadayn
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Canada's
 people in bast in1988 16%
and
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, and
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 the same level
of
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as Germany
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germany
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increasing
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, increasing
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 in
2000
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2000,
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 about 5 % to before
, in future
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. In the future, it
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 will
be increasing
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increase
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 to 26%. Uk lowest figuer of olderly people 14% in 1988
and
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, and
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 letal increas in
2000
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2000,
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 15% and the high figure may increasing in 2030 around 20%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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