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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think that goverment should only focus their spending on public service and they claim that spending on arts is a waste of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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majority
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The majority
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 of people argue that
athorties
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authorities
 have to
leed thier
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allocate their
 money on public
servies
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services
instead
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to
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of
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 spending
outly
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it
 on arts.
however
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 i partly agree with
this
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statment
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statement
.
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firstly
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Firstly
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,
goverments'
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governments'
 priority should
fouces
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focus
 on
citizen
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citizens'
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 needs
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for
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, for
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instance
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instance,
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 health-care
problem
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problems
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. Despite many of citizen average income face an issue to afford health care and lifestyle
cost
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costs
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, which
leeds
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leads
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 to
solve
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solving
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 the problem by focusing on
cost of living
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cost-of-living
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such
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, such
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 as salary increases
to
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for
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 those who have high rates
traditional
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of traditional
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jobes
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jobs
. and
provision
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the provision
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 of
them
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apply
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free medical assistance for emergency conditions. If the government have attention to solving
citizen's problem
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citizens' problems
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,
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finally will
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it will finally
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 decrease crimes.
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secondly
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Secondly
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, arts
becoming
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are becoming
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 one
the
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of the
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 most remarkable
markts
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markets
 to
attracting
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attract
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 tourists to visit and have an experience
specially
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, specially
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 to investment entry into the country and leeds high-quality living for
population
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the population
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,
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. Additionally,
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additionally
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this
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 provides opportunities to raising the standard of living and supporting new generation of learning and health Insurance.
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finally
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, both
are paly
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play
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 an essential role
of
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in
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 individuals'
life
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lives
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, but if Authority focus on solving issues first
instead
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 investment to second priority to prevent crimes and migration.

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task response
State your main view more clearly in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this view the same all through the essay.
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Develop each main idea with a clear reason and one simple example. Some ideas are good, but they need more support.
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Answer all parts of the question in a direct way. You talk about public service and art, but the balance between them can be more clear.
coherence cohesion
Use a clearer paragraph plan: intro, one body part for public service, one body part for art, then a short end.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, however, and in conclusion. Some links now are hard to follow.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one. A few parts jump too fast from one idea to another.
coherence cohesion
You give a clear topic in each body part: public service first, then art.
coherence cohesion
You have an ending, and it shows your final view.
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You include relevant ideas like health care, crime, tourists, and jobs.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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