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Band 3

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at

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Nuclear
power
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 provides
cheap
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a cheap
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energy
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sources
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source
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.
Some times
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Sometimes
 the present sources of
energy
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 like oil, gas
etc.
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, etc.
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 will be finished. Arguments in favour
nuclear
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of nuclear
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power
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:
The nuclear
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Nuclear
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energy
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produces
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is produced
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 by chemical materials. It is comparatively
cheaps
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cheap
 than other
energy
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. To produce the
power
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it
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, it
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 only
involve
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involves
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 some expert people and
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energy
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an energy
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 plant.
Where to
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To
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 produce other
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energy
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energy,
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 it needs
large
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a large
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involvment
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involvement
 like
worker
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workers
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,
machineries
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machinery
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, etc.
And
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It
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also
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 takes more time. The nuclear
power
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 plants are
wellprotected
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well-protected
 and
monitor
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monitored
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.
That is
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 why there is less possiblities. The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace because the developed Countries like
U.K
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the U.K.
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,
U.SA
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the USA
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, Canada, France
etc.
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, etc.
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 have nuclear weapons (
Warhead
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warheads
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). Each
Country do
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country does
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 not give
threat
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a threat
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 to other
Country
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countries
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. Because
They
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they
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 know if
One
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one
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 country distrub other,
then
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other
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the other
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 will create problems
from
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for
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 them. So it is wellbalanced and world peace
maintains
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is maintained
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 peacefully. Though there are sometimes
creates
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apply
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problems
by
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created by
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the
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apply
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nuclear technology
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, but
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but sometimes
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apply
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it
also
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help the
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helps
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 mankind in the
field
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fields
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 of
medical
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medicine
 and engineering
sector
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apply
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. In the medical
field
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field,
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 we can say
by
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that by
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 nuclear ray sometimes we can treat a
canser
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cancer
 patient.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 in the field of Enginering by the
nuclear
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, nuclear
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power
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 engineers can do
lot
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a lot
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 of things
like
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, like
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 operate
engine
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an engine
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instead
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 of
electricity
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generating electricity
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 we can say
though
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that though
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 there are some Problem in the nuclear
power
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but
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,
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 it has some
benefit
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benefits
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 for
the
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apply
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mankind

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task response
Answer the full question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in the first part and keep this view all through the essay.
task response
Add more clear support for each main idea. Explain why nuclear power is cheap and why nuclear weapons keep peace with one more simple reason or example.
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Use more direct examples. You name some countries, but you need one clear example that shows your point.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your writing easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words better, like First, Also, However, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the one before it. Some ideas now jump too fast.
task response
You answer both parts of the topic: energy and weapons.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion is present and it matches your main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs for different ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Mutually assured destruction
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Cost-effective
  • Radiation therapy
  • Proliferation
  • Rogue states
  • Radioactive waste disposal
  • Catastrophic accidents
  • Climate change
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