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Band 2.5

The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans provide key information about a
collage
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college
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cafe
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 in the past
and
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, and
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 it is not designed, and how
looks
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it looks
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 now in the
peresent
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present
.
Overall
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, it is clear from the plan that there
is
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are
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 some simple changes
on
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to
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 the
cafe
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,
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.
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In addition
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, the kitchen
still
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is still
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same
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the same
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but
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, but
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 they
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change
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have changed
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 a
bin
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 to
recycling
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a recycling
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bin
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,
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.
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 As we can see, they
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change
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have changed
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 the serving area to hot meals,
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Whereas
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whereas
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 the
table
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tables
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 and
charis
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chairs
 are still in the same place.
According to
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 what is shown, the
cafe
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 before it is not interesting, there is
no
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apply
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nothing there, only the tables and chairs, and we can see the toilets on south
west
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 of the
cafe
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 and the
bin
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 on the
west
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, on the
north east
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northeast
 we can see
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 and serving area ( all food and drink ). In terms of there are many changes in the present
cafe
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, as we can see the staff dining rooms are changed to take away food and coffe bar,
Furthermore
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, they put outdoor seating on south and salad bar on
west
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 of the
cafe
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, the serving area it changes to hot meals,
However
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, the toilets still in same place, we can see a tiny
change
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 about the
bin
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, it is
change
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 to recycling
bin
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, and on south
west
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 they but a barbecue and entrance on outdoor seating.

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task response
Write a clearer first line. Say what the two plans show in a correct way.
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Give a simple overview of the main changes. Put this after the first line.
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Pick the most important changes only. Do not add too many small points in one line.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear groups for ideas, such as old plan in one part and new plan in one part.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'also', 'but', 'now', and 'in contrast'.
coherence and cohesion
Check each sentence. Some lines are hard to follow because the order of ideas is not clear.
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You compare the old cafe with the new cafe many times.
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You mention key parts like kitchen, toilets, serving area, and seating.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has more than one part, so the reader can see some plan in it.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use words that show change, like 'changed' and 'still'.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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