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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

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The two maps demonstrate a
manufactural
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manufacturing
 area in the
town
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 called "Norbiton", and its
planned
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planned future development.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the main plan is to replace factories with housing and connect the farmland with
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town
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the town
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.
In addition
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, it is focused on building facilities for future housing owners. Currently, the industrial area only consists of factories which are located in the
center
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centre
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 of Norbiton. The north of the
town
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 is surrounded by the farmland
which
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, which
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 is separated by the river,
while
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 in the southern part, there is a main road that connects the area with others.
According to
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 the proposal,
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town
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the town
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 is going to connect to the farmland by a new bridge. New roads are going to be built in the
town
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 connecting new housing and facilities like
playground
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a playground
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, shops,
medical
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a medical
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 centre, and
school
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a school
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.
In addition
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, a new
roandabout
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roundabout
 is going to be built in the southern part of
the
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Norbiton,
while
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 additional housing is going to appear over the new bridge.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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