the pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

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The two pie charts illustrate the breakdown of different types of
energy
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production that
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coal,
gas
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, petro, nuclear and other sources in France, in 1995 and 2005.
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,
gas
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and coal made up the largest share
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energy
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production in both years.
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the shares of nuclear and other resources nearly doubled, petro production dropped significantly in the ten year period.
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, in both
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gas
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and coal were the largest
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in the chart, where in
1995
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1995,
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gas
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was at 29.63% and coal was at 29.80%. By 2005, it remained almost unchanged, with a small growth of 30.31% and 30.93%.
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, the same trend can be seen for nuclear and other
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resources that stood at 6.40% and 4.90% in 1995, and extended in 2005 to 10.10% and 9.10%, which covers the smallest section of the chart.
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to 1995, in
2005
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2005,
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petro was the only
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resource that experienced
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significant decrease, from 29.27% to 19.55%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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