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The table and bar graph below show time spent on leisure and household activities in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table and bar chart compare the average
time
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 spent by people in the UK on free-
time
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activities
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 and housework, highlighting clear differences between genders and among
age
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 groups. In general,
it is clear that
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men
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 spend more
time
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 on
leisure
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activities
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,
whereas
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women
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 spend significantly more
time
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 on
household
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 tasks.
Additionally
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, the data suggests that
leisure
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time
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 tends to rise with
age
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, as the oldest group reports the highest number of hours of free
time
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,
while
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 younger adults have the lowest. When comparing
leisure
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activities
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 by gender,
men
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 spend slightly more total
time
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 on free-
time
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activities
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 than
women
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. Specifically,
men
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 spend more
time
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 on
activities
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such
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 as TV,
sport
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sports
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, and hobbies.
In contrast
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,
women
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 spend a little more
time
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 on reading or social
activities
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. Shifting focus to
household
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 work, there is a large gap between genders.
Women
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 clearly spend much more
time
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 on cooking, cleaning, and childcare,
while
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men
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 spend less
time
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 on most home tasks.
This
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 is the most significant difference presented in the visuals, as the gap between
men
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 and
women
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 is small in
leisure
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 but very large in
household
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activities
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.
Finally
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, the bar chart illustrates how daily life changes across
age
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 groups.
Leisure
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time
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 rises with
age
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;
this
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 may be because older people are less involved in work and spend more
time
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 at home.
Consequently
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, the oldest group consistently shows the highest number of hours,
while
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 the youngest group accounts for the lowest.
To sum up
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,
while
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 the gender gap in
leisure
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time
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 is relatively narrow, the division of
household
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labor
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labour
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 shows a clear difference, with
age
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also
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 playing a major role in how much free
time
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 individuals have in their daily lives.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, activities, age, men, leisure, women, household with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure activities = free-time activities
  • household tasks = housework
  • spend time on
  • the table shows
  • the bar chart shows
  • compare
  • overall
  • in general
  • slightly more
  • much more
  • less time
  • the highest
  • the lowest
  • older people
  • younger adults
  • men and women
  • age group
  • number of hours
  • per week
  • free time
  • at home
  • a clear difference
  • a small gap
  • a large gap
  • rise with age
  • the oldest group
  • the youngest group
  • daily life
  • main feature
  • it is clear that
  • while
  • whereas
  • in contrast
  • also
  • respectively
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