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he line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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A glance
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grahs
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graphs
 gives
informations
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information
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 about the
number
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 of
subscriptions
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 to mobile and fixed
phone
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line
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lines
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 in some
lands
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countries
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 (
India
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,
UK
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,
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Uruguay
,
Eritrea
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) from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, there is a significant gap between
Eritrea
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 and
Uruguay
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along
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, along
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 with
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Eritrea
 and
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UK
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in
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, in
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 mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 and landline
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subscriptions
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subscriptions,
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 where
Uruguay
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 is recorded with the highest
number
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 in mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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;
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UK
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 is
showed
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shown
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 the highest in fixed
phone
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 susbcriptons and
Eritrea
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with
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has
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 the lowest
number
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 in both
type
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types
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 of
subscriptions
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 . In detail,
Uruguay
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 and
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india
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 were both significantly low at the beginning of the decade
with
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, with
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 25 and almost 10
subscriptions
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 per 100 people, respectively .
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apply
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 over
the
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time, they both dramatically
growed
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,
Uruguay
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 rose to 150
subscriptions
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 per 100 people in
2015
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2015,
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 with its peak
2013
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in 2013
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 to over 150
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and
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, and
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India
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 went for a considerable rise of almost 75
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 in 2015.
In contrast
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 to the countries left,
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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, that didn't show much over the 10 years:
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Eritrea
 remained stable
to
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at
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 almost 10
subscriptions
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 and
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UK
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riose
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rose
 slightly in 2006 to 125
subscriptions
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 and stabilized to
this
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number
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the
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 next years,
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, in
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terms
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 of
suscriptions
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subscriptions
 for
landline
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landlines
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, all countries didn't show considerable changes
,
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;
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 they were all constant. To be precise,
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Eritrea
,
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 ,
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 and
,
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UK
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 were stable to over 0,5,over 30 and under 60
susbcriptions
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subscriptions
, respectively
per
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, per
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 hundred people
with
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, with
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 some
negligles
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negligible
 fluctuations .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, subscriptions, phone, india, uk, eritrea, uruguay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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