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the line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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A glance at the graphs gives information about the
number
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 of
subscriptions
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 to mobile and fixed
phone
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 lines in some countries (
India
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,
UK
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,
Uruguay
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,
Eritrea
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) from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, there is a significant gap between
Eritrea
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 and
Uruguay
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 ,
along with
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Eritrea
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 and the
UK
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 , in mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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 and landline
subscriptions
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, where
Uruguay
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 is recorded with the highest
number
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 in mobile
phone
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subscriptions
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; the
UK
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 is shown the highest in fixed
phone
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 susbcriptons and
Eritrea
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 has the lowest
number
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 in both types of
subscriptions
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 . In detail,
Uruguay
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 and
India
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 were both significantly low at the beginning of the decade , with 25 and almost 10
subscriptions
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 per 100 people, respectively .
Although
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,
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apply
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 over time, they both dramatically grew,
Uruguay
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 rose to 150
subscriptions
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 per 100 people in 2015, with its peak in 2013 to over 150
subscriptions
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 , and
India
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 went for a considerable rise of almost 75
subscriptions
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 in 2015.
In contrast
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 to the countries left,
Eritrea
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 and the
UK
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, that didn't show much over the 10 years:
Eritrea
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 remained stable at almost 10
subscriptions
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and
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, and
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 the
UK
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 rose slightly in 2006 to 125
subscriptions
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 and stabilized to
this
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number
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 in the next years,
Moreover
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, in terms of
subscriptions
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 for landlines, all countries didn't show considerable changes
,
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;
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 they were all constant. To be precise,
Eritrea
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,
India
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 ,
Uruguay
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 and
,
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the
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UK
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 were stable to over 0,5,over 30 and under 60
subscriptions
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, respectively , per hundred people , with some negligible fluctuations .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, subscriptions, phone, india, uk, uruguay, eritrea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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