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The graph below shows the percentages of people in four age groups who had been to the cinema more than once a month, in the period between 2000 and 2011.

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The line graph compares the percentages of
people
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 in four age groups who went to the
cinema
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 more than once a month between 2000 and 2011.
Overall
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,
people
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 that younger than 25
years
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 old, especially the 7-14
years
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 old age
group
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, account for more than half of the population, in the period between 2000 and 2011. The percentage of
cinema
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 attendance of
people
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 who are older than 35
years
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 old
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 remain steadily near 0% in 11
years
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 time period.
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, there are some dramatic jumps, for the 7-14-year-old
people
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group
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, in the period between 2000 and 2011. In 2000, nearly 40% of
people
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 who were 7-14
years
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 old went to the
cinema
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, and there were some dramatic ups and downs every two
years
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, and the line reached nearly %60 in 2011. The
people
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 who are between 15-24
years
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 old, follow the 7-14
years
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 old
group
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 at nearly %40 band , and the attendance peaked in 2004 and 2011 and rose above of 40% band. Meanwhile, the 25-34
years
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 old
group
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 accounts 20% of all
cinema
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 attendance in 11
years
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, only in 2010 the line reached approximately %30;
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, it fell again to exactly %20 percent next year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cinema, years, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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