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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

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The bar chart compares the rate of women and
men
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 in an Asian nation who took and passed their driving exam from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, both genders increased.
In addition
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, since the beginning of the period, women recorded a higher figure than
men
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 and kept increasing . In detail, women started with around 48% ,
in contrast
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 to
men
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 , whose level was lower, with around 28% .
Although
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men's rate
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the rate of men
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 sharply rose in 1990 to just under 50% and
remained
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has remained
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 stable since 2000.
In contrast
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 to woman that slightly increased in the following decade, from 48% to over 50% before reaching a peak at around 68% and
then
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 nonchalantly decreasing
at the end
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 of the period

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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