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Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter • describe what you like about the library • say what you don’t like • make suggestions for improvements You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my opinion about
library
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 services and send some suggestions to improve your operation. I have been using your
library
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 services for 25 years
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 even my son has started to use
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 as well. I really enjoy
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your
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personnel
 staff and the way they serve the
library
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 users. They are always polite, friendly and easy
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 what you want
to
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. The
library
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 is equipped with
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comfortable furniture which helps
user
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 to feel
freely
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free
 and work
efficient
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. You
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 have the reading room with the daily newspapers, magazines and other
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informative
 resources. I really appreciate all
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 things in your
library
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,
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 I have some concerns I would like to share with you. The thing is
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can not find
anymore
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the recent edition books or books
of
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 authors of the current century
.
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 Of course, I understand we can always find them in the bookstores or in Internet. But everybody will agree with me that there is a great pleasure to read a book alive than in computer or
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other
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resources. So, it would be nice if you
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 with your management to update it. And plus, I know, it would be costly
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may be
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maybe
 saving your time, to buy a computer and load a
data base
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 of your collection of books. We live and work in the 21st
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century.
That is
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 all I would like to share with you. Yours faithfully,

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts, but your ideas need more clear support and more exact examples.
task response
For task response: Keep the tone polite and formal all the way. Do not use short spoken-style lines at the end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some sentences are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in one paragraph. This will make your letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Use linking words like also, however, because, and finally in a more careful way.
task response
For task response: You clearly say what you like, what you do not like, and what you want to improve.
task response
For task response: The tone is mostly polite and fits a letter to a librarian.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter is arranged in a generally clear order.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: You use paragraphs, and this helps the reader.
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