The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams indicate the alterations being made to the
school
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from 2004 to 2024 to accomodate for the predicted increase in student numbers from 600 to 1,000. In 2004, the
school
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only
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one car park with a
path
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leading from the main entrance to the
sports
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field
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. The
path
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seperates
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separates
the
two
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school
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buildings
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,
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the
sports
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field
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, are located north. Trees are present north, north-east, east, and west of the
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the
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planned for 2024 has
two
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carparks and three
school
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buildings
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. The
path
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in the 2024 plan links building three to
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one and
two
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, which are planned to be joined together by building infrastructure. A road is envisioned to connect carpark
two
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with carpark one.
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the
sports
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field
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will be reduced in size and relocated south of its previous location
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carpark
two
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. The surrounding trees remain in similar positions
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requiring a few trees to be repositioned or replanted around new infrastructure. These changes to the
school
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buildings
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, road,
path
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, carparks and sportsfield aim to house the extra 400 students planned to be attending the
school
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in 2024. The only decrease in size of any part of the
school
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from 2004 to 2024 is the
sports
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field
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in order to
accomodate
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accommodate
school
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building number three.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, path, sports, field, two, buildings with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • layout
  • facility
  • infrastructure
  • main building
  • green area
  • sports hall
  • library
  • expanded
  • recreational activities
  • structural improvements
  • accommodate
  • enrollment
  • renovation
  • development
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