The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The data compares how the UK unemployed spend their time by
genders
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gender
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.
Ovrerall
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Overall
,
housework
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is the most popular among women
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while
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, while
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Job hunting in
morning
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the morning
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and watching TV in the afternoon is the most common among men .
Housework
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hit the highest percentage,
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drinking remained significantly low . In detail, the majority of
female
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females
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do
housework
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in the morning,
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males are either doing job hunting (22%°) or doing shopping (20%) at
this
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moment.
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, drinking is the least common in the morning for both genders
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only 2% for men and 1% for
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women,
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followed by playing
sport
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sports
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. In the afternoon, men tend to watch TV (14%), gardening (13%), visiting friends or Job hunting (12%), whilst women still either do
housework
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or
also
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visit some friends .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words housework with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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