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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people prefer to
keep
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stick
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 to things that they can or use to. I think it has
good
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a good
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 side and bad side. First of all, keep to do same thing make you forcus to
things
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focus on things
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. You can learn and enjoy deeply.
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, keep to do same thing makes you
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comfortable
. You can relax
to
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and
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 do it. If you have
bad
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a bad
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 day, you don't need to look for what makes you
elax
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relax
 because
you
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you're
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 already used to
do
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doing
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 it.
For example
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, you can watch
film
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a film
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, visit
place
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a place
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, eat food
whatever
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, whatever
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 you like or used to. You can go back
your
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to your
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 routines.
On the other hand
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,
keep
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continuing
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 to do
same
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the same
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 thing is
avoid
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avoiding
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 your
charenge
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challenge
. When you try something that you don't like or
new
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that's new
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, it makes you
unconfortable
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uncomfortable
.
when
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 you face things that you don't understand well. It
.
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apply
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 must be
scared
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scary
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 and unconfortable and
then
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 you have two choices, Charenge or escape. You
dorit
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don't
 need to always choose
charange
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change
, but you have to ask yourself, is escape good for you? You need to have
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 time or
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things
 like hobbies. It must be good for you. But
sometime
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sometimes
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 you have to try to put yourself in unconfontable it makes you improve
and
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, and
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 it brings knowledge.

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Answer both sides more clearly. You talk mostly about one side.
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Give your own opinion in a clear way in the start and end.
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Use one clear example to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make one idea in one paragraph, and keep the order easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like first, also, however, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the next one clearly.
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You stay on the topic and write about habits and trying new things.
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You give some reasons, like comfort and growth.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph shape with a start, middle, and end.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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