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the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050

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The graph
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illustrates
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 the
population
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 in two
Asia
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Asian
 countries (
lndia
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India
 and
China
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) between the years from 2000 until predicts in 2050
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,
it is clear that
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 India has the
most
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highest figures of
population
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 in the future,
while
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China
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 has a slight drop
through out
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throughout
 the years . In
2000
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2000,
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 India proportion was a One
billions
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 people and has
a
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apply
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consistently
incrasead
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increased
 until 2050 to reach about 1.6
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billions of
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billion people
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population
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 . It
is
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can also
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also
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 can be seen that
in
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between
of
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2020 and 2030 India has climbed to 1.4
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billions
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billion
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In
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 other hand,
China
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 begin their proportion at around 1.3
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billions
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billion
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 and
keep
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kept
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 increasing until 2020 , before it slight drop . In
2025
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2025,
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China
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has
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will have
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 the
peaking
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peak
 figures of
population
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 with almost 1.5
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billions of
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billion
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 people .
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 , the two countries
has
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have
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 the same proportion in 2023 with around 1.45
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billions
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billion
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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