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You recently took a short cooking course at a cooking school, and they have asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the school. In your letter • describe what you found enjoyable about the course • say how often you have practiced cooking since the course • suggest another cooking course you would like them to offer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to provide feedback on the Indo-Chinese course that I took at your institute. The course was longer than I expected, but I really enjoyed the digital method used for teaching.
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 enabled us to learn different dishes without actually getting our hands filthy. I have
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 more than a dozen times to make spring rolls and Momos. I used to watch videos on the virtual platforms in
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class, and later
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 the same techniques to prepare. Apart from the classroom, I
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 daily in the evening at home.
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, served the dish to my family members.
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school
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 offers three different kinds of courses on Chinese cuisine, I am requesting the classes for Indian meals.
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 anticipated course, as
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 of the population living in the city
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 Indian cuisine. These individuals
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survey
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 were demanding
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an institute to learn that cultural food at home. Thank you for providing excellent classes again. I hope you consider my suggestion. Yours truly, Praneet Singh

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coherence cohesion
Make your ideas more clear and easy to follow. Some lines are hard to understand.
coherence cohesion
Use better linking words like 'also', 'after that', and 'because' to join ideas.
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Answer each point with more exact detail, especially your last idea about a new course.
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Keep the tone polite and natural. Some parts sound a bit too formal or not natural.
coherence cohesion
You followed the letter form well with a clear start and end.
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You wrote about all three points in the task.
coherence cohesion
Your main ideas are easy to see in each part of the letter.
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Your purpose is clear from the first line.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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