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You have recently ordered an item from the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. Write to the company. In your letter •Describe what you purchased •Explain why you are not happy with the purchase •Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my
dissatisfation
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dissatisfaction
 with your service. I am Shruti and purchased
Boat
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the Boat
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 Headphones 2.0 model in black colour from
online
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your online
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to your
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apply
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store. I
orderd
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ordered
this
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product
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 because my friend recommend to me, and he told me about
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product
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the product
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 features and sound quality.
Unfortunetly
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Unfortunately
, I
recieved
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received
 the order after 2 days
and
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, and
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When
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when
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 I
opend
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opened
 that
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product
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product,
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 it was
on scratch
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scratched
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 in both
airpods, after
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AirPods. After
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that
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that,
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 I checked
sound
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the sound
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 quality
one
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, and one
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 of the
speaker
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speakers
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 was not working properly.
Although
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,
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apply
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 I was very
exited
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excited
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 to
used
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use
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 them when I
orderd
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ordered
 them.
As a result
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, my mood was
spoil
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spoiled
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 and sad
to feel
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apply
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. I called
to
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my friend and shared all the things with him,
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, he told me to contact
with
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apply
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your company. I heartfully
wants
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want
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 to use
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this
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these
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 same
airpods, if
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AirPods. If
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 it is possible Can you please exchange
this
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product
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 and give me
a
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the
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 same model? I appreciated
with
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apply
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that, and parcel me at my same home address. I attached reciept of
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product
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the product
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 and my home address in
this
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 letter. I hope I recieved in
timely
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a timely
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 manner and for
this
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 time without any damage. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Rox.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not clear. Say what you bought, what was wrong, and what you want in a more direct way.
task response
Task response: Use a more polite and formal tone. For example, say 'I would like a replacement' or 'I would be grateful if you could help'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some lines are hard to follow. Put one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'when', 'so', and 'therefore'. Do not add extra ideas that do not help the main point.
task response
Task response: You include what you bought, why you were not happy, and what you want the company to do.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter uses paragraphs and has a proper greeting and closing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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