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You want to rent out a small apartment to a family, and you have decided to advertise it. Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper asking to advertise your ad on the front page of the newspaper. In your letter, give details of the ad that you want to publish mention that you want the ad to be published on the front page say how you would like to pay for the advertisement

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Dear Mr Thommes, I hope you have been doing well. My name is Taylor
and
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 I am writing to make a request
of publishing
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to publish
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 an advertisement
of
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for
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 renting my
apartment
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 to a decent family because I will be moving out to a different city
due to
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 personal reasons.
Firstly
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, I want to provide some information
of
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about
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 my
apartment
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. It is two bedrooms, kitchen and a full washroom
apartment
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. Not only is it fully furnished
but
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also it is
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it is also
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 newly renovated. It is located
at
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on
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 Main Street, Toronto. There are recreational facilities available in the building, convenient public transportation, grocery stores are nearby and a school which will be
a
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 best fit for a family. The reason why I prefer to have
this
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 article on
first
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the first
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 page of the newspaper is that people have busy
schedule
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schedules
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 and they often read the initial page of the newspaper.
Also
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, to rent
this
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apartment
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 is
top
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a top
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 priority as I need to lease it as soon as possible. To pay the charges of
this
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 advertisement, I can visit
to
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apply
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your office during working hours,
specifically
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 I am planning to come around 4 PM
and
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, and
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 I would like to pay in cash. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
consider
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could consider
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 my request
on printing
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to print
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this
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 advertisement on
first
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the first
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 page. Please let me know if the given time mentioned to visit your office does not work
,
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;
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 I am open to
reschedule
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rescheduling
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 it. Looking forward to hearing back soon. Yours faithfully, Taylor

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task response
Make your main aim more clear in the first lines.
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Add the exact ad text or key rent details like price and contact.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part.
coherence and cohesion
Use short link words like also, so, and because in a clear way.
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Keep the tone polite but more formal. Do not use too many long lines.
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You answered all three parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing are good for a formal letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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