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Band 4.5

You have some time off work and are hoping to visit a close friend, Stephanie, for a few days. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter suggest spending time together explain why you have time to do this propose some activities.

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Dear Ms. Stephanie How are you?. I hope
this
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then
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in good health. It has been a
while
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 since we
last
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 met. So
i
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I
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 thought
i am
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I was
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 writing to inform
to
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you
who i
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that I
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 will have
day
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a day
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 off
on the
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next week.
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,
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i
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I
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 have a
plant
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 to
coming
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come
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 to your village because
i missing
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I miss
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 some views there. First of all, one of thing would be do is i wanna seeing the sunrise in the morning , after that we will
surfing
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surf
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 as it is long time i did
not do
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that
again
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. I think it will be
our
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an amazing
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 activity amazing
due to
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 we have not been
do
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doing
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 a lot of things together on the beach because we
always
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are always
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be
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busy at
office
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the office
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you
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 do not worry about my job because the manager
given
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has given
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 me one week
for
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off for
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 holiday . Someone will handle all of
work
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the work
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while
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i
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I
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 am staying at your house. I would be
delighte
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delighted
 if you accept my invitation
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And i
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 guess it will be new memories
in
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this
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 year.
i
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 am looking forward to hearing your response soon. Your faithfully Paul

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task response
Score: 5. Make your main plan more clear. Say when you will come and how long you will stay. For example: “I have one week off next week, so I would like to stay with you for a few days.”
task response
Use a friendly style for a close friend. Write “Dear Stephanie,” not “Dear Ms. Stephanie,” and end with “Best wishes,” or “Love,” not “Yours faithfully.”
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Put one main idea in each part: first, your visit; next, the things you can do; then, why you are free; last, ask for her reply.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well: “First,” “Then,” “Also,” and “Finally.” This will help the letter move from one idea to the next.
task response
You answer all three parts: you ask to meet, say why you have time, and give things to do.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. The beach plan is easy to see.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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